She loved the winds

This poem is very original although profoundly the lyrics of the seasons don't fear the reaper came to mind without a morbid thought because the wind stirrs the passion from the sun

This free verse is very well written and floews flawlessly with great imagery
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She was autumn, he was winter
She was spring when he was summer
He was everything she needed
as the fairy-tale went under...
^^ aw why?! opposites attract!! : /

The sea in his eyes was unsettling
like a tale she couldn't narrate
like the breeze that you feel in a winter scene
where efforts to bloom are in vain
^^ great imagery here honestly you did an amazin job

She got sick in the waking of summer time
and the sun was in war with her dreams
He was in love with someone called Loreley
While she danced in the forest's winds
^^ very specific name..did this happen for real? i loved the second line it gave a great mental image!

Sit by my side and I'll make for you
a story that will make you sing
for a love that could not last forevermore
For it got lost in the forest's breeze
^^ it is like the love is playing hide and seek

She loved to always look at the picks
yellow or blooming or cold
He loved to look and see nothing
no end,no,nothing at all
^^ this is an in depth stanza by itself!

Sit by my side and I'll weave for you
a story that will make you sing
if you find that you're like her too,
she who loved the forest's winds.
^^ i love how you incorporate nature in just about every poem i have read it makes you unique!

5/5 : ) good job!

This was beautiful. the imagery was great. and i agree it seems a little sad. my favorite was the last stanza, the weaving part. very nice. and the beginning is capturing. nice job

Wow. this was beatiful made me smile. and i felt a lil sadness in this poem too but it was perfect it mixed together good. idk y but i felt that in this poem. i really truly love it. amazing words u choice. the flow was great. keep it up! amazing job!

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy