Comments : Im Sorry

  • 16 years ago

    by Hollymariee

    That your memory keeps me preoccupied.
    That i can't leave you behind .
    ^^ that rhymes and flows better with your poem : )

    The flow is really off in your third stanza , and your last stanza isn't really a strong finish . Theres some work to be done but good job , 5/5 !