Clear from reading you work, you have a strong way with words. Your language is pretty tamed yet quite complex. I haven't got time to do a proper comment but I loved your wording in this piece. Just thought I'd let you know I'll be looking forward to reading some more material from you.
This is quite a subjective poem, and I liked how the form complimented the tone you used.

Great work!

-Danny

Flow is fabulous, *sigh*, im speechless.

"the shapes
do not repeat, and the
sheet is left bare. Fast, yellow
movements and the
winter twigs are weak."

Great, great great, much better 5/5. :]

I can see you put thought into this good job 5\5