Yeahh heart ache is a hard thing to take but hey it makes a great fuel to write with :) I can relate to this but obviously from the guy's point of view hehe. Keep writing and if I could suggest something...it'd be that maybe if you just wanted to get a point across...perhaps break from the rhyming scheme and just say what you want to say without constrictions :) great job

cheers, josh

Thats awsome!
ive been in that same situation many times
with the same guy everytime. i know your probably thinking why put youself through that so many times, but i honestly dont know.

anyways. its really good.
but like the other comment said, just dont try to ryhme so much, just let it some out.
kind of like word vomit. hehe.
\-good job.

Ohh LOVE it. and yupp the second part of ur poem the awesome. lol.

I gotta agree with my asian brotha Josh. Heartache does suck but it does help people write amazingly pieces of poetry. Keep on going as a writer.

-Dan

I love you Becca.
and i'm so happy that jerk is out of your life forever.
you're an amazing poet and i wish you would write more often because i miss them.
you're who got me into poetry and i would have never been the same without it.