Learning to Dance in the rain

by Finalgravedigger   Dec 5, 2008


"Learning to Dance in the Rain."

Isolated in a frigid world of rain and hail
Where the desecrated land is bare and wrinkled
Inhabitants barely live as they remain forever pail
Dreading their blue hell as it's severity is fickled.

Dwelling with eyes that can hardly blink
Mouth chattering is their reminder of suffering
Wandering around as their heart's sink
Their only hope sadly is happily dancing.

The rain has an inconstant and sudden beat
As they moves their limbs wildly and aimlessly
Leaping and rushing around with bare feet
Ruptures flow through their bodies shamelessly.

Grabbing each other as they party to thunder
Smiling as they dance laughing at one another
Forgetting their suffering and immense hunger
Enjoying their lives as they wont live much longer.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Deana

    This is an excellent write , I could visualize a people doomed by their environment still finding a reason to celebrate, if only for a moment...great work.

  • 15 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    The rain has an inconstant and sudden beat
    As they moves their limbs wildly and aimlessly
    Leaping and rushing around with bare feet
    Ruptures flow through their bodies shamelessly.

    *I love love this stanza. The word choice is amazing and really highlights the way you're feeling. This was such a strong and emotional piece and I can tell you really put alot into this piece. I felt so many emotions and they were all clearly expressed. The flow was great and didn't get in the way of your feelings or words. I think this is one of the strongest poems I've read from you. Keep it up dear. Nik*

  • 15 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    You have not lost it my friend this is another masterpiece

  • 15 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    You are talented,, keep it up,, u know how to write ur poem, and it made me enjoy.. great work

  • 15 years ago

    by kate

    This was very interesting, i never read anything like this one before, and i could picture it happening. It seems like the message from this poem I mean i could be wrong but it seems like you should do everything like play in the rain as long as you can because you never know when you will pass away. thats what i got out of it and its very true.

    keep it up.
    keep on writing.
    love always and forever.

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