Lucille

by Teria   Dec 6, 2008


LUCILLE

She learned at an early age,
how to fend for herself.
She brought hope to the children
that laid by her bed,
and dreams the ones...
with words left unsaid.
She found true love too many times,
with thoughts that this one would work.
But, I've given advice,
with the least amount of hope.
"Go prepare yourself for battle,
you've yet to fight the war.
Try and settle down this time,
your hearts getting a tad bit sore.
Retry what you've failed at,
remember what you've won.
Bring your soul some ease,
this I ask of you -
Lucille, my darling... Please."

Broadened her future,
she let go again...
just to return to pain.
She cried, she screamed
that life's unfair.
As she started to dream
of the past and what it seemed.
Her mother, now gone..
Oh what had she done?
To deserve such a mess.
I've given advice once again,
as she carves the pain into her skin.
"Go prepare yourself for battle,
you've yet to fight the war.
Try and settle down this time,
your hearts getting a tad bit sore.
Retry what you've failed at,
remember what you've won.
Bring your soul some ease,
this I ask of you -
Lucille, my darling... Please"

Forever she mourned
for what she had lost,
regretting over time.
The thoughts unending,
hope unveiling,
and dreams gone to sea.
The death of her love,
the loss of her son...
Oh, how could this even be.
I've given advice,
with hope for a cure,
I couldn't ask for more...
"Go prepare yourself for battle,
you've already fought the war.
Try and settle down again,
your hearts a tad bit sore.
Retry what you've failed at,
remember what you've won.
Bring your soul some ease,
this I ask of you -
Lucille, My darling... Please."

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  • 15 years ago

    by AngelicDecadence

    Wow, I cannot say much about this, other than Wow. This touched me, in a way more then most, the "My Darling" i know was to show the deep feelings you have for this person, but for me, it was unnecessary, now, you don't have to change it, for it doesn't take much from the poem, but I would if i were you.
    I don't believe I will forget this poem, and it made me think about things, thanks for that. The plee was repetition that fit nicely with the poem, it all flowed together very well.

    Amazing.
    *Chaotic Angel*

  • 15 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Well written... deep and at some point its touching ... at some places I liked the words you have used to express the emotions ...

    one suggestion would be- you can do away with some of the "she"s and "the"s

    overall a good read...

  • 15 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This poem is very original yet it brings to mind a line from a song they said she died easy from a broken heart disease

    the plee seems to be to break the cycle instead overall I find the poem to be very deep the way I like them.

    5>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>