Comments : I'm Here Without You Baby.

  • 15 years ago

    by Blissful

    "As time passes the steps to reach one another dissapates,
    but the love they bestow evolves into a secure, eternal love."
    ^Flawless use of the word "bestow" and "dissapates" It didnt overpower the poem but just meshed with the flow you had going.

    "A lovely fairytale once a delusion will become reality in an instant,"
    ^Aww! I love how you worded this...nice use of "delusion" is was perfect and fit in with what you were saying.

    "Honey coated words will escape"
    ^I loved how you said "honey coated" instead of sweet. It was a perfect use of expanding on vocabulary and making your writing stand out. Very unique and I applaud you! :]

    Very beautiful love poem you have here my Tempsy. I'm sure he'll love it. Love is worth the wait no matter what. If its true and genuine then no matter the distance or the wait you two will find a way to make it work, I have my faith in you two. :] I wished this was longer because I felt there was more you could have said and it felt that you ended it too soon but other then that the emotion was powerful and the meaning behind your words was beautiful.

    Well done my dear.
    *5/5* :]

  • 15 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Excellent. Romantic and does express very well how you miss him. The last three lines pull it all together.

  • 15 years ago

    by Crystal Rose Blooming

    You guys are soo cute ^_^ I loved this poem, and I can see by the comments so does everyone else.Beautiful