He stood

He stood
with unseeing eyes
throughout the night
^^maybe wondering eyes instead? somethinga little more mysterious!

Frantically whispering
we'll be here soon
But tomorrow never came
and yesterday's loss remains.
^^ i like how you didn't give a lot of background just what was needed

This poem could have had a little more to it but what you have is sufficient. The reader got what they could out of it. It was vague but in a interesting unique way i enjoyed it but i think other readers will want more
5/5 from me though i personally like poems you need to conclude your own things from

Nice short snipit I'd like to call it, it feels like it is just a piece of a poem and not the whole thing. Perhaps if you add more to this it would be better since it felt like the poem just suddendly stopped without you displaying the overall image/thought of the poem as a whole.

Overall it was well written, but like I said above I felt it could be much better in length.

Peace, Joe

Short and sweet, which has been my favourite style it makes a poem very powerful but also allows for the opprtunity to expand later on.