I miss you ( Shadorma)

by Ingrid   Dec 7, 2008


I miss you
My heart grows heavy
Feelings fade
All turns black
You are my sun and my moon
I love you so much

A shadorma is a non-rhyming verse of six lines with a strict syllable count of 3,5,3,3,7,5. There can be more than one verse as long as the syllable count remains the same.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    Hmm, interesting poetry form.

    It was short, but it worked. I liked the sun and moon part a lot along with the feelings fade. I love using fade in a poem, it's such good imagery. Well, since it's so short I'm not sure what all to say about it other than good job and I have nothing to critique! Tee hee. XD Five out of five.

  • 15 years ago

    by Cotton Candy Clouds

    I miss you
    My heart grows heavy<<great wording there so many people will be able to know how that feels!
    Feelings fade<<an all time true
    All turns black<<been there : /
    You are my sun and my moon<<ahh..very great symbolism!
    I love you so much

    Great poem!! you are so talented to be able to write poems like that ! 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by kelleyana

    A few lines, yet means so much. I am sure it won't be for long you have the presence of that special. You are a great poet and i admire your writing. Keep it up, kel.

  • 15 years ago

    by Crystal Rose Blooming

    What a sad little poem. You said so much in so little words. Excellent write

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