You gave me a chance,
Promised me the world,
You gave me your all,
I was a lucky girl.
^^awww cute opening!

You promised me things,
Others already had.
But Ibelieved in you
Cause you didnt seem so bad.
^^aught oh...whats going to happpen?!

Your future together,
Set and secure,
Then you mentioned
That youd rather have her.
^^ahh there it is :/

That I was your Rebound,
Your "get over her" girl.
You never really wanted
to let me be in your world.
^^guys can be such jerks! im sorry : /

You wanted a Simple way
To get her out of your mind.
You went looking,
And who did you find?
^^love the question on the end here it really helped !

A broken down girl,
With her smile barely alive,
This broken down girl,
Not likely to survive.
^^survive what?! ((it is good to keep the reader asking questions it keeps them interested))

So you tore me down more,
Knowing the truth,
Knowing there was nothing
That I wouldnt do for you.
^^guys take girls for ganite so often!

You kept up the lie,
Seeing how long Id hold on
Knowing you didnt want me
All along.
^^great job using the title at the end!!

5/5 really a great poem : )

Beautiful. This stanza was my favorite:
"So you tore me down more,
Knowing the truth,
Knowing there was nothing
That I wouldnt do for you."
I was very excited to see you had a new poem up. I loved this one. I think it's my favorite. Some guys just aren't worth it. But for every ten that aren't, there's one who is. And sometimes, even the ones who aren't worth it are fun to have while they're there. Wonderful flow. You mastered this one Ash. 5/5

Wow.
its amazing how how harsh people can be..
but excellent flow, and rhyme.
You ended it really nicely, with the title-good one.
The way it tells out the story does a good job of captivating the reader(me) haha
5/5 :)

That was a very good poem. it pulled me in and i didnt want to stop reading i wanted to know the ending.

It was a really good poem and i enjoyed reading it alot:) 5/5