Pride And Dreams

I no i've already commented above, but ive been through experiences similar since then so i give you a more detailed one.

I moved into the never-ending worl
I tried to pick the pieces up and start anew
But everywhere I turned around
Every place reminded me of you

- worl take it you meant world. i think the last line is a little forced and therefore you should reword it try- i was plagued with memories of you? don't no just a suggestion like.

Somehow, somewhere away from here
The world turns, though I stand still
I've tried so hard to move on
I tried to live with all my will
- a powerful image of the world still turing though you stand still possibly as you cannot let go so your feelings are un moving.

Although I'd never say it to you
I'd take you back if you'd come
Just to lay, content in your arms once more
Hoping that never again, would you run
- them words were very true, through experience i would have said that given half the chance i would have taken someone back if they came..stupidly i wished this and it came true. it was over and i should have excepted that instead of trying again because it will never be the same and you can never pretend that they never left you because the damage is done :(

Our pride and dreams are in the way
And nothing will ever be the same
Although I know in my heart your mine
Its just that physically with me you'll never remain
- thats a sad final stanza, the dreams getting in the way is something which i believes deeply saddens it. it also portrays hope as a conclusion is given and that an acceptance has been reached that you no that they will never be there again, but you will always love them.

firstly, simple language is always the bets with me, my vocbulary would be something very similar to yours.

loved the poem very sad but true and won me over.

well done :)

Can guess who....??? nah playing... its beautiful brit and hey you wrote what i didnt want to hear.... i now hate males that are over the age of 12.... funny how we used to understand each others stuff so easy and i read this and i feel like crying coz the one im madly in love with no longer gives me a second thought unless hes drunk and i just want things to be normal but no matter what and no matter how long id still welcome him back you and i both no it... how sad ay....
anyways girl i love it, its perfect n he missed out....

This is something i think alot of people are going to relate to. it takes a long time to get over lsoing someone you loved, and some people will never get over losing that one person.

you wroet this beautifully. xx