by Cotton Candy Clouds Dec 11, 2008
category :
Love, romance /
i love you
((I wrote this poem to my best friends mom. Her mom has had a rough year, she lost her mom and now going through another rough time Her mom has treated me like a daughter always been there and never let me fight a battle by myself. Me and my mom do not get along, and her mom stepped in. I was trying to help with this)) |
The words you use give the poem more of an emotion! |
This inspiring and beautiful even lifted my spirit though the personal touches were obvious they did not make the read any less enjoyable |
by kelleyana
From the title to the poem, it just wondetrful. I think you'd made a great tribute to your friend mom. Sometimes we'd great person who came in our lives and means so much to us as if they are our own blood. Very well done as usual. It merits 5/5, keep it up, kel. |
by Faithless
I like they way you set the tone for this poem though it was meant for someone you love that was lost, you set it in a very peaceful and calming manner which was indeed a delightful to read. I believe if she had read this poem, she would be delighted too to hear tt it was written from you, a daughter that was bind not by flesh and blood but with the heart |
This is truly great. I love the analogy of "your rock through a cyclone" that is beautiful. It first brings the question of why that makes sense because in a literal form you would wonder why that applies to a person but then you realize it's saying that you "hold this person down" during the tough times. A wonderful use of a great metaphor. The rhyme scheme is great and you definitely make it work through the entire poem. My only complaint is that the flow gets a little choppy at times because your meter is rather varied in this piece but I still enjoyed it quite a lot. Excellent write 5/5 |