"nothing to lure you in
nothing to capture you but me in words "
^^ i guess thats what everyone has here... to express through words..

and you definately did a good job...

very different kind of imagery you have painted here... its seems somethings going inside you, trying to burst out and it took the shape of words...

well written..

Wow this is really quite interesting. I love it. Its almost like a spoken verse piece but it's a bit odd to say aloud. I really love the beginning, about insomnia, I have insomnia mostly because of the anti-depressants I take, but also because there's so much stress just to stay awake and get things done, these things that in the end have such little meaning and yet we spend all our time completing them. I think that's the point you were trying to get across and I loved it. Not to say it took me a couple times reading it to understand, but writings should be like that. Obscurity is key at times. Truly excellent 5/5

My favourite part was,

"is this worth the hours of heads slumping over desks
the moments of leaning against walls, only half-finished
despairing in earnest then... just to feel
for these few minutes
alive and awake
in a different way?"

That was just so beautifully written for me. I think the poem has a lot of kinks to work out (i'm no better lol) but I really like it. The last stanza could have been left out for me but otherwise it's great. :)