Its simple
Its Sad yet the way that you have written it has made it beautiful.

well done
keep up the good work
5/5

Im going to be a bit harsh on this one, sorry. But i didnt really like any of the poem at all, except for the last few lines, because they were very powerful with only saying a few simple things, i think it should of been longer and had more thought and emotion added into it. I liked the idea of the poem though. 4/5