Very nice. It flowed very well together and the rhyming was very clever. Emotions were strong and came through clearly. But the Romeo and Juliet idea is a little too over-used. Writing your own fairytale, made up, or even using situations from your own life is much more exciting and easier to connect with. They're just a few tips, and I'd love to see you grow as a writer. You definitely have talent, 5/5.

-mandy :)