A Candle's Promise

by SashaMirage   Dec 12, 2008


A million words would fail to describe you
As life is now painted in a fairytale hue
Tears once glistened on every rose with dew
Yet the warm sun dried them and made me anew

Shall the essence of our love remain always?
I'll sacrifice my life, illuminating your days
Becoming a candle, burning bright along the way
Always with you, be it a cold night or sad day

Although lighting the wick means I will melt
Radiance remains, for a great love has been felt
With the last flicker of life, I'll shine so bright
That my silhouette will linger as your guiding light

Dying to shine for you, is worth my last breath
I promise you my all, even if it means my death

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  • 15 years ago

    by waiting 4 some1

    Honestly it's very wonderful poem!!
    well written and very nice flow.
    great emotions were put inside....good job

    maybe you can add two more lines on the end using "earth" "worth" as last words on those lines...just suggestion :D

  • 16 years ago

    by oddi tea

    Amazing. My favorite stanza is

    "Tell me do you want my love to remain always
    I'll sacrifice my life for the rest of your days
    I will become your candle and light the way
    I will be here for you, be it night or day"

    I like how you add the love with the sacrifice that seems to be lacking in relationships today. The willingness to go to the end of the earth and do anything and everything for your loved ones. Amazingly written, even more amazing idea, and perfect feelings behind it. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    How touching and heartfelt your words are, emotion is just pouring out of this piece, and your comparisons are outstanding. Writers like you that have a different style, orginality and uniqueness, are a joy to have around and reading your poems really is a treasure for me. This piece was straight from your heart, and took me away. Great work! Keep writing, always and forever. 5/5 from me, take care...

  • 16 years ago

    by CanUKissAwayMyPain

    OMG!!! i love it! it was just so beautiful. i really really loved the last two santzals. those truly touched me inside. wonderfully writen. another amazing job you done here. Please do keep it up!
    5/5

    TaKe CaRe,
    Frenchy

  • 16 years ago

    by Matilde Pedraza

    Geat poem i loved it is so cute so sad but addorible but oh so true if i had to rate from 1-5 i would give it a 10

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