This poem was magnificent. I loved the flow and the rhythm, it was amazing. Your rhyme scheme made it more powerful, something we can all feel is the pain when we fight with someone we care about and know deep down what they're doing is wrong. This poem shows that you are smart though and strong. Keep your chin up and keep writing. Don't let anyone tear you down.

My only critique is the very last line, I think you could eliminate the "already" and it would make the flow a lot smoother and still make perfect sense.

<3Raych

This was just WOW. You’ve put a hell of a lot of emotion into this which is very clear. Each line carried on to the next so well, with an excellent rhyme scheme which penned together amazingly. Excellent work. 5/5 xx

I love this one! its really good. you have alot of talent, the emotion in it is amazing.

The flow in this poem is pretty good through out and the rhyme too. It is fast paced and the words breathe a venomous warning to it, something like..if you play with fire, you're gonna get burnt buster!!

Well done on this.

Michael x

HA! Oh, this poem made me feel so good.
I think it's great you are able to see through the manipulation, so many don't.

Your poem was short, but it rhymed well and you managed to say so much within this small amount of words, really good:)

and now you want to change it all
well i am not about to fall

^^

Most of the times this is just...words:)

Good write, I enjoyed it:)

Take care,

5/5 Ingrid