I find your poem extremely good...
It flows very nicely and it has a very intersting structure...
The theme reminds me of my own... It seems like you are reading my heart...
The ending is amazing, yet sad... I only think you might have developed a little bit... :)

5/5

*isabel*

Awww this poem was very sad indeed. the choice of words that you used really bring out the emotion from the poem.I like the way you end it it really pierce me how sad this poem is

Excellent job
5/5 from me

Wow that was very sad. You did a very good job in your description and making your readers picture your words. I could really feel like I was watching a video of what you were saying. I really liked the sad ending. 5/5

I like some of the ideas of the ryhmes and the way you put them but the entire poem is so choppy it just breaks from one line to the next without any flow connecting the two, I know all stanzas shouldn't be a sentence but using different word choice makes things flow alot better, you may have been going for a choppy scheme with that tone, but im not sure, so all i can say is try and say the stanza aloud to see what it sounds like, if you can close your eyes and read two lines in a row and not be able to tell where the break is then it has "flow" I dont rate if I dont give a 5 so try it i promise it helps!