Comments : Because I Love You

  • 15 years ago

    by Trying to hold on

    So tender and unique in a descriptive, elegant way.
    Its been a while since I've read your poetry but you have bloomed more and are growing and improving, and it was wonderful 6 months ago too.
    I congratulate you and hope you continue to write these Beautiful, honestly lifting pieces.

  • 15 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I've never been good at writing loves poems so I have the respect for anyone who can actually write one. To me they are the most difficult piece to write simply because the emotion is so rare and raw when loving someone. You on the othe hand have impressed me muchly. This is because you don't just write a piece that says, "I love you forever" You scrap that, thats much too cliche for your writing. You write with words that actually speak emotion and you let them fill your heart. Hardly when you write a love poem do you speak directly to the person you may be writing it to, you only do this on the slight towards the end like you have done here:

    "Romance:
    You're blissful
    descant."

    Even though this poem is portrayed like you are talking about romance being your love, and how much you adore it. I get the feeling from this that you are using romance for a metaphor for someone. Either way it works brilliantly and lets you create such emotion that can only be felt within a true lovers heart. Again I adored this piece and thought it was really well wrote out. Well done. -Mel

  • 15 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Excellent imagery has entered my mind when I read upon this piece and your emotions are so real to me....

    "Constellations
    taste
    like dark chocolate."

    I love your writing style, very refreshing and it really is a treasue to read. Unique wording here...

    "Ocean breeze
    whispers
    secrets of the waves.
    Eyes mirror
    entrancing violet
    skies;"

    My favorite part, the way you worded it set everything perfectly....Nice work...5/5 from me, keep writing, always and forever....