Comments : The world in her eyes

  • 16 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    A gift from the rainbow
    In the storms you are my shelter

    I really like those last two lines. :]

    I liked the descriptions in the poem. I wish there was more of a structure though. I know you have rhymes in some parts, I just like to see a little more structure in poems, that's just me though. Other than that you did a pretty good job. :]

    Four out of five.