Conquer the Fear.

by Fantasy   Dec 16, 2008


With this poem, i would love to have some criticism, its the rough draft, and its kinda important, i will take any comment into consideration, so, please, feel free to speak your mind.

She sits in her room,
Her knees held close,
Blocking the nightmares that lurk in the shadow.

How could she possibly make a difference?
What could she say, to make it go away?
Where could she go, if it all backfired?

He sits in his room,
His knees held close,
Blocking the nightmares that lurk in the shadow.

How could he possibly make a difference?
What could he say, to make it go away?
Where could he go, if it all backfired?

They could wander the world,
They could leave the rock,
That sheltered their fear,
They could stand,
In the middle of the battle field,
And scream until it hurt.

They could set sail,
And leave their home behind,
Unafraid of what lies ahead,
And totally oblivious to the danger they face.

They could give in,
And just stay,
They could wonder,
And never find the answer,
Or they could fight,
And learn the true meaning,
They could leave,
And come home believing.

Enough with the face they hide behind,
They could be strong,
And inhale the problems in day to day life,
Living life a lie,
Is a total waste of time,
Cant we all just stop pretending,
And conquer our fear?

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  • 14 years ago

    by SheenaMarie

    Superb write 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Stephen

    This is a very good piece of poetry, the best advice i could give you is though, it needs some rhythm into it, if it had a nice flow, it would be by far one of the best i've read on this site.. keep your head up and keep comin with the good work.. you got talent sweetie

  • 16 years ago

    by OmniLotus

    =) i read it like 6 times back to back. love the end stanza. <3

  • 16 years ago

    by OmniLotus

    =) i read it like 6 times back to back. love the end stanza. <3