The Call

by Faithless   Dec 17, 2008


A call from a distance
Joy filled in an instance
Longing for your presence
To hear your first sentence

Voice so sweet and melodious
You render me speechless
Are you from the planet Venus?
Cause you seem to have found my weakness

Though physically you are not here
My visions are now perfectly clear
Beautiful words of yours soothes my ears
Moments which I have been waiting for years

As the sun's ray illuminate my room
You're looking at crescent moon
Words producing waves of volume
Thoughts of you had my mind consume

Candy sweetness scent of your perfume
Wardrobe filled with colorful costume
Inside your princess style bedroom
All of these just makes my mind go boom

Is that really you?
Could all this be true?
No longer need we wait for a cue?
Real conversations of us two?

Just three words I need for a confirmation it's true...
I love you

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  • 15 years ago

    by No Need For A Name

    I'm sorry, but as I read your poem, all I cold think was "meh". It flows well, it just seems maybe a little to sugary sweet for me, or maybe it's just the way it was presented, that it did not seem unique to me. Sorry

    Peace and prosperity,

    (RKD)

  • 15 years ago

    by Katie

    I like this one. Good job keeping up the rhyme scheme for that long. Not terribly easy to do.
    Thanks for the comment. :)

  • 15 years ago

    by Teria

    "A call from a distances"
    [ A call from a distance]
    OR
    [A call from distances]
    - 'a' = one. adding -s = more than one.

    "Cause you seem to found my weakness"
    [Cause you've found my weakness]
    - I actually liked how you had the original line laid out but it didn't go with the poem too well.

    This poem is great. Overall it flows quite well. It definitely captures attention and is relatable (which I believe is a HUGE PLUS in poetry). I liked the third and fourth stanzas, they stuck out to me big time. You did a really good job with this poem.

  • 15 years ago

    by Blissful

    Beautiful! Your words were filled with such meaning and love that I could tell it came straight from your heart. The rhyme was great and your use of imagery gave the poem a nice touch.

    Well done!
    *5/5* :]

  • 15 years ago

    by SashaMirage

    That was so beautiful Azzzza. Every word was so sweet and meaningful.

    "Just three words I need for a confirmation it's true...
    I love you"

    The three words I have wished so long to say
    I shall no longer hide in my heart or delay
    You are my soulmate and dream come true
    Let the stars shine as my witness as I say:
    I Love You

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