Comments : If I could...

  • 15 years ago

    by kelleyana

    This is absolutely a beautiful love poem. This is my favorite stanza "Sometimes I wonder, if I could just
    Drive away her pains, her griefs and dissatisfactions
    For all those moments when I left her isolated
    By gifting her a kiss for her neverending affections
    And give her all my love, as the time stands waited."
    My goodness, when we love someone, if we could take away all the pain and sorrow , we're will to share it or keep it all for ourselves just to make the one that our hearts beats for to be happy.
    All i can say my friend, don't wonder sometimes, just make it happens. Sitting and day dreaming is only a comfort to the mind, but think of the heart? Find that inner force that will pushes you to go forward.
    I enjoy my read. Keep on writing. It merits 5/5, kel.

  • 15 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Well Bhavin...if you give her this poem, I am sure she will know just how much you love her:)

    Sometimes I wonder, if I could just
    Drive away her pains, her griefs and dissatisfactions
    For all those moments when I left her isolated
    By gifting her a kiss for her neverending affections
    And give her all my love, as the time stands waited

    ^^^

    My favorite stanza, wanting to drive away all that may discomfort her is such a true sigh of devotion:)

    Good job!

    Hugs,

    5/5 Ingrid