Wow, I feel like I've read this before and really liked it. Actually I'm sure I have and gave you the 5 because I didn't have time to comment ^_^
Okay, one of the best paragraph poems I've read, at least for a long while. This is where we see you're a better poet than me, man these lines are good...the imagery...I'm not sure I'd be able to put that out! You must be a great prose writer!
I was going to show you my favorite lines--but I can't choose. Great job stumping me! hehe.