by Bugg Dec 20, 2008
category :
Love, romance /
secret love
Your eyes don't lie |
by Sourav
Good one... In a way it's a simple write. Nice work! |
by H E Losey
Your story is interesting as is the rhyme scheme. My read was not as smooth as it should be as your metre/rhythm is not there. |
by Empathy
I absolutely loved reading this poem because some of stanzas I found I could relate to. It reminds of the situation I am in with love right now. Though it is confusing beyond belief for me, this poem makes me feel like I am not so alone in my predicament, but I digress. |
Awww... this was beauitfully writen. i can relate to this. ur heart pounding with life cuz he's nxt you and ur breath goes away with that smile but he doesnt even know he does that to you. sading but also happy. ya.. i really do love it. Great job. Keep it up! |
by Katie
Kail this is so great! Would it happen to be about a guy whose starts with a J? |