I do like the message behind the poem. I am unsure as to what you were getting towards when you were trying to send the message. It did confuse me a lot.

The first stanza really didn't grip me like all the others that you have before it.

I really liked that you showed your intelligence in here, which is something that I feel that a lot of others don't. I thought you were talking about Xanadu the musical...hehe. It honestly wasn't something that I was aware of before I read this.

I have lived with night terrors for probably 4-5 years of my life and really it's hard to even put what they are into a piece of paper or a digial copy.

I think that this poem lacked some structure as if you couldn't make up your mind on what type of format that you wanted to go on.

I liked the message and felt that it was one that you could have done better on in all honesty. I enjoyed some of the things that this did display to me though, the Xanadu one for part. It was really good to see you show off some of those smarts Jennifer. I believe that you should do it more often, you'll probably out smart most on the boards.

"Even though it seems okay death does leave a trace."
[okay, death]
- Add a comma there.

xanadu - I like the word, now that I know what it means. Haha

One thing that I'd mention, other than this being a good poem, is to watch for over-used words, such as; never, will, to, so, isn't, death. They are okay in small amounts and sometimes they're okay in huge amounts - it depends on the poem. I think that a few words are repeated too many times. Even if it's just one too many, it's one too many. Like I said, some poems are good with that and some aren't. You just have to learn which is which.

One thing I've learned is not to use a word just to add a syllable count - if it makes the line/stanza/poem seem too wordy or elongated I suggest finding another word or line to replace that one. It might take a bit more time, but it's well worth it.