The Jetset Life Is Gonna Kill You

"Fame.
Fortune.
Everyone's dreams come true.

Isn't it?"

^^Beautiful way to open the poem. Thought provoking and insightful, a wonderful way to hook the reader.

"The sound of forgotten voices,
The sight of faded photographs,
Flutter freely through your mind,
Reminding you of who you were."

^^I don't think you need "the" in the first and second line.

"The smell of leather handbags,
The sounds of tinkling diamonds,
Linger in the cool, crisp air,
Reminiscing over memories of glory."

^^Again, I don't think you need "the" here. I really like the imagery here.

"The feel of the glowing tarmac,
The taste of petroleum,
Meet together in unison,
Planning journeys of glamour."

^^Again, I feel this would flow better without "the." I feel that you use it to often throughout the piece and it spoils it for me.

"The taste of the thick air,
The smell of the dancers' sweat,
Rendez-vous in your mouth,
Yearning for champagne."

^^Can you guess what I'm going to suggest? LOL. I really liked the last two lines here, I found them powerful.

"The smell of another line,
The taste of another tablet,
Mix with one another in your body,
Making you feel alive again. "

^^Remove "the" and I feel it flows so much better.

I absolutely love this piece, it really makes the reader think about the choices they make in their lifes.