Paradise (new Version)

by Poetic Grunt   Dec 23, 2008


They gave me a green uniform and Tan boots for my feet
Eighteen and wild as hell, I thought it would be neat
They put me on a plane to some strange and foreign land
I said my good-bye to mom and dad and hello to Uncle Sam

Once I was a soldier and not afraid to die
Now I'm a little older and not afraid to cry
Everyday I'm thankful just to be alive
When you've been where I've been any kind of life
Is paradise

Christmas of two thousand eight was a lonely time for me
Iraq was probably great but it was nothing like Albuquerque
I never thought the day would come when I might have to kill a man
I did not sleep a wink that night but we won for Uncle Sam

Once I was a soldier and not afraid to die
Now I'm a little older and not afraid to cry
Everyday I'm thankful just to be alive
When you've been where I've been any kind of life
Is paradise

If you've been where I've been any kind of life
Is paradise

It's paradise
Paradise

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  • 15 years ago

    by Iris

    0.0 this poem is so sad but really good!!
    so sad that many dont make it T T *sniff*

    THANKS TO ALL WHO SERVE!!!!I PRAY FOR YOU ALL!! GOD BLESS YOU!!

  • 15 years ago

    by Teria

    "They gave me a green uniform and Tan boots for my feet
    Eighteen and wild as hell, I thought it would be neat"
    [They gave me a green uniform, tan boots for my feet
    Eighteen and wild as hell ... I thought it would be neat]
    - ellipsis work well here, I think. You had 'and' two times in two rows and it through me off. So, I do suggest changing one or the other and replacing with a comma.

    This poem made me bawl my eyes out, so they say. I feel for our troops and my heart goes out to them. I know a lot of the time they don't realize what they're getting into. Even though I support them for their decision and I'd do almost anything for any of them. I still think that it's not right. There's good men fighting for a lot of selfish people.

    It's good though. That when you get home and see your family you know what you have. Unlike many ignorant people in this world.

  • 15 years ago

    by X Harlea X

    Wow.amazing. this was another descripitive piece from you Shadowe. I like this one a lot more than the others that i have read. This one had emotions and everything in it, and it rhymed greatly.
    ((5)) Harlea

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