Soldier Vs. Self

by Poetic Grunt   Dec 24, 2008


Born again and shivering
Spat out on new terrain
Unsure and ever unconvincing
I wash my soul's stains in the pouring rain
This faint and shaky hour
Time alone is my worst enemy
Through faith I gain the power
The power to control my destiny
Day one, and I start over again
Letting go of promises laid broken
Thoughts start pulling me back before I can begin
Blocked from the gates of heaven, will they ever let me in?
Step one, making sure I breathe
Vowing to myself I will never fall
Remembering the world is counting on me
Truth, faith and honor.... for these I stand tall
But right now I'm barely making sense
For now am i faking this?
Living under false pretense?
But then in war ignorance is bliss
So I'm pseudo- making it from scratch
A new life born with the coming of the dawn
Starting again not fearing time will elapse
No longer am I attested to being another pawn

-Shadowe

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  • 15 years ago

    by Teria

    "Truth, faith and honor.... for these I stand tall"
    [Truth, faith, and honor ... for which I stand tall]
    - You need your commas. (: And, I think that replacing these with which kind of gives it a more poetic form. Just my opinion though.

    It's hard to relate to this poem with how you wrote it. The emotional boundries set on the other hand are so easily related to by me. You've made it your own poem, not just a poem for the readers. Which I adore a LOT. You're a good writer, a good poet. Keep it up. (:

  • 15 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Very interesting write, in which I enjoyed reading. I like unique writes such as this one. Your flow was good but the structure I felt would've been better if broken into stanzas. Overall a well written piece of poetry, keep up the great work.

    Peace, Joe

  • 15 years ago

    by Courtney Hough

    Step one, making sure I breathe
    Vowing to myself I will never fall
    Remembering the world is counting on me
    Truth, faith and honor.... for these I stand tall

    is my fav part.......so good makes u think how ur life really is over there,and how good i have it for people like you.......stand tall and know people here like me are proud of u protecting our country...........5/5

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