Comments : Love...set to part...then meet again......

  • 15 years ago

    by isabel

    Your poem is flawless... Absolutely wonderful... Yet I would suggest you would divide your lines in two... so the rhyme scheme becomes clearer...
    for example:
    instead of:

    As every passing day unfolds, with you a bond so strongly holds
    It's laced with love,with trust replete...it really does make me complete...

    you could write:

    As every passing day unfolds,
    With you a bond so strongly holds
    It's laced with love,with trust replete...
    It really does make me complete...

    It would be easier to read and you can see at first sight that you use the aabb rhyme scheme...

    other than that, it is great

    5/5
    *keep up*
    isabel