I love Him

I really like this poem because it is my favorite subject....love :)

Here we are in this cold lonely night.
and the lovely moon was shinning bright.
Your sparkling eyes is staring at me.
and your sweet face is what i only see.

^A very pretty opening. I like the stanzas and I like the rhymes, as well. You did a good job with the word choice. P.s...if you really were staring at the moon with your man, I'm kind of jealous. :P I've never gotten to do that with my guy. How pretty it must have been.

Come hold my hand, never let me go.
Come kiss my lips, i love you so.
Promise me you'll never leave.
Without you, I can't live.
^I was rather disappointed here because I loved the 2 first lines and then the last line is what disappointed me because it didn't rhyme even though the first 2 did.

Overall, that was a beautifully written piece and I think that you are quite talented. I enjoyed that poem very much so. 5/5

Great work,
Loni