My Battle With Impatience.

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"Patience has ran low once again as I am waiting for you,
longing to hear your voice and sweet words to comfort me.
Yet your presence is not near and contact has become slim,
the absence of my hero makes me lose my sanity at times,
but our love will only continue to strengthen as we're apart."

I love how you write all about your emotions, and how you are in so much pain, because he is away, and you're just longing to hear his sweet voice...Well-expresed...In the ending line, I like how you bear with it, and put your head up, nicely done..

"Tears have been the cause of these wet rosy cheeks recently,
missing you is not something I always enjoy, sometimes struggling
to make it through the day, but knowing that your love for me
is so strong and pure, is what makes me wake up and realize
you aren't gone, you'll always be with me, and you'll never leave."

Beautiful wording here, even though he is gone and you miss him, you suddenly realize that he isn't really gone, he is with you still, his faithful love will never leave you. Terrific emotions here, showing the pains of him being away, then seeing his strong love and having faith and a bit of hope..

"Entwined with love forever we'll never depart, as you will always
hold the key to my heart, I love you with every ounce of my soul.
Waiting to speak to you at this very moment, wishing to tell you
that - at times my patience may run low but it just shows how much
I do truly love you and how I'll work hard to make this obstacle of
impatience within me no longer an imperfection, but something I
can be proud for overcoming, something I accomplished for you."

Great ending, you really make the reader feel that this poem is so alive, which it is. And this is such a indepth poem, I really enjoyed reading it. Keep writing, always and forever..5/5 of course.

Temps you are such a sweetheart. I love how your feelings just flow so easy in your poems. Patience is a tough one for all of us. It will come to you. This was a nice sweet poem.