Wow,what a wonderful poem sasha.It was really great and so magical.I really loved and it really showed your talents in writing.

Excellent sis...Welldone.5\5...

Well who would have thought that tryin to compose a poem about another would lead us to producing this...I think this the best work that we have done so far...and with you indeed you have taken me to explore new direction. I'm very glad to have worked on on this poem with you;)

"Traveling toward a sweet seduction
Sailing blue waves void of caution
Embracing thoughts, sweet temptation
Eastern born, beautiful infatuation"
That is so gorgeous sounding!

"Curiosity, impulsive obsession
Liquid molten, love's protection
Meaning unveiled, no interpretation
Crossing borders of secret rejection"
This is so well written. It is very pretty and visual! Great collab!

"One leap across a sparkling ocean"
[One leap across sparkling oceans]
- The change not only sounds better and flows better with the rest of the poem but also transforms the line from a simple (yet poetic) line to a line that seems more majestic. Almost as if it's not realistic but in a dream. And, I think the rest of the poem seems majestic in a way.

"Curiosity, impulsive obsession
Liquid molten, love's protection
Meaning unveiled, no interpretation
Crossing borders of secret rejection"
^^ Loved that stanza, it's written beautifully.

This is a very good poem. I enjoy how you two worked together to create such a wonderful piece. It doesn't go off topic/flow at all from transitions of writers (where that would be, I've no clue). You work quite well together. I really liked how you used very little adjectives and words that aren't needed but instead replaced with commas and beautiful combinations of imagery. One thing I might mention is to watch out for too many commas. There are a few places that don't need them, yet have them. It doesn't mess up the flow or anything, there's not that many of them. But, I'd still keep an eye out for that from now on.

I thought it was beautiful. I agree that this is your best collab yet. The words flowed together perfectly. You could feel...everything. And I agree that it kind of has an Aladdin/Jasmine feel to it. I was unsure of it at the beginning, but as I read more, I began to fall in love with it a little bit. 5/5

Wow, and excellent poem good work both of you's

Blazing fire, forbidden vision
Burning desire, deep sensation
Hearts aligned, same direction
Magical unexplained connection

My favourite stanzam
meaningful and well written.

Great job