Firefly

Great use of sophisticated grammer. I'm speechless.A job well done!
5/5
Chinwe
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"Stars twinkle in realms above,
As peaceful as Noah's dove.
Releasing light unto our world
From the first day that it twirled.

The stars fall from their grace
Every day in this galactic race.
Catching one from the sky,
I marvel at this 'firefly'."

^^I frikken adore these opening stanzas, the imagery here is so beautiful, and creates such pretty pictures in my mind.

"I caged the firefly, like a coward;
Research, I did; the Internet scoured.
Failure hit me, a slap round the face.
Could I ever be forgiven for this disgrace?"

^^I liked how in the previous stanzas everything seemed so light and full of hope, and here it's suddenly wrong, and you don't know if you'll be forgiven, it made for an interesting affect.

"I realised with a quiet sigh
That my captive was not a firefly.
Never would be, never could be,
I wondered if she would forgive me."

^^I think the last line would flow better if you had "she'd" instead of she would.

"My 'firefly' was my one true error,
So I helped her escape my terror.
With a thrust into the sky,
I released my star, my firefly. "

^^I really liked this closing, again beautiful imagery and I liked the sense of freedom here.

I found this poem to be both original and unique in concept, and a refreshing read.