Comments : To Our Guys / From Your Girls.

  • 15 years ago

    by Blissful

    I can already tell by your writing styles which stanzas which. Temps wrote the first and third. Crystal was second and fourth.

    "saccharine words "
    ^That just gave it away. Temps has that in all her poems lol.

    I could just feel the love you two expressed here with your words and I'm sure TJ and Karan will love it just as they love you. Nothing left to say but that I enjoyed it.

    Well done.
    *5/5*

  • 15 years ago

    by Dark Savior

    This has been done many times, the interesting fact is that it has never been done in two's. I enjoyed this format.

    I can tell who wrote each verse as I know you both, Does that take away from the poem? nope.

    From the first day we met love blossomed beautifully
    never once has it dwindled or lost its elegance since then,
    it only continues to grow into something potent we share.
    A promise to be together forever was built in an instant

    - Started off with a lot less imagery and I found at points trying to stumble to find the words that can describe love...it's often something that every poet struggles with.

    Romance lives in our hearts, tender words of love on our tongues
    Intense physical longings linger so gently on my skin and lips
    Like the touch of the softest feather you send shivers down my spine
    An addiction of the strongest kind has trapped this heart in time

    -Shows the second stages of love, it's the physical attraction after you have known that it was him and only him that you believe that you are in love with and not just a physical attraction, but as well an emotional one.

    Your saccharine words made me melt like ice in a fiery flame,
    igniting butterflies that soothed my soul, leaving me speechless.
    You are the reason for this radiant smile that I wear with pride,
    my love for you can be expressed as something immortal and sacred.

    -this is where I find that you think imagery is important and I have to say that this is where the poem comes into it's own. I think that this is a wonderful line and really don't have anything to say about improving the line.

    Suns a little brighter, gentle winds caress my tear stained face,
    Embraced in the purest love intoxicated sensual bliss
    Joy lives in my heart, happiness fills the empty void
    Eager for your tender touch the eternal thirst to quench

    -Favorite Stanza, wonderful imagery and it continues from the last one as if it were no transition. Wonderfully done. This poem is very much worth the 5.

    Over all I felt that the poem did transition sort of oddly, but felt that it was really well done when you started with the imagery.

    Very well done, both of you should be commended.

  • 15 years ago

    by Crystal Rose Blooming

    I loved doing this with you. Something so different , I've never seen it done before. You had a wonderful idea . Thanks for asking me to join you in making our guys happy

  • 15 years ago

    by Faithless

    This is a wonderful collaboration...the both of you have penned down a very beautiful poem...It really made my day Hands down to the both of you.Excellent Job