The days of our soul.

by Teria   Dec 29, 2008


Fruitful earnings push us down,
as we work so hard to forget the rest.
Our kids, our smiles, happiness adrift.
We've lost it all, we've lost our best.

Don't you remember the days of our soul?
Where the tenderness of lips could make us whole.
The sadness of others, oh it tore us all down.
And happiness was all we needed to float and not drown.

We've changed who we are and exactly where we stand.
Drug ourself to some far distant land.
We've revised a plan on how to succeed,
but forgot the most important of the unplanted seed.

Don't you remember the days of our soul?
Where the smiles of our children made us whole.
The sadness that they cried, oh it tore us down.
And happiness they shared was all that we needed ...
to keep us afloat, failing to drown.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    I myself believe that poetry and though I have criticised for changing rhyme schemes fro quatrain to quatrain I am still very comfortable with it some have a prblem with it I feeel it enhance this one well and dare not suggest any changes

    well done poem with a powerful theme

  • 15 years ago

    by Dark Savior

    Interesting choice of what to do. You(if i'm correct) are talking about how we as a society have changed and now it's not the simple pleasures that give us the joy in life.

    I think that if the above is true that is one of the strongest poems that I've seen on here. I enjoy the message rather than the poems a lot of the time, I think that the message can stay with us while the poem can fade from our minds.

    There is also another funny part, I just submitted a poem similiar to that only on a smaller scale.

    This is a very well done poem.

    5/5

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