Chilling ^-^ You have inspired me to try and give it a go.
Wonderful job Temps good luck

"I follow a narrow strip of lightness showing me the way."
^I dont think "lightness" made sense here. Just "light" sounds better.

"hoping not to disturb the dead as they enjoy their peacefulness"
^I didnt like "peacefulness" Try "tranquility"

"A tall dark shadow appears in front of me as gasp for air, yet I choke,"
^WOW. Loved it!

"sending shock waves through the silence and peacefulness."
^Still dont like "peacefulness" Just try "peace"

"I see nothing but pitch black, I hear nothing but pure silence."
^I loved the repitition here...very effective. :]

Wow Temps this was so different for you and you did so well with it! The descritptions were haunting and eerie and I felt as if I was experiancing this with you. I liked how you didnt say what was it that caused her fear and left it as a mystery for the reader to come up with their own idea of what happened. You left it to the imagination...well done! You didnt use a lot of complex words here which sometimes overwhelm the poem. The flow was great and your choice of words complimented everything.

Well done!
I really enjoyed it.
Good luck in the contest. :]
*5/5*

"Attentive eyes open wide show nothing but worrisome thoughts,"
[Attentive eyes opened wide show nothing but worrisome thoughts,]
OR
[Attentive eyes open wide showing nothing but worrisome thoughts,]
-grammical speaking, that is.

"A tall dark shadow appears in front of me as gasp for air, yet I choke,"
[A tall dark shadow appears in front of me as I gasp for air, yet I choke,]
OR
[A tall dark shadow appears in front of me, gasping for air, Yet I choke,]

I really enjoy this poem. It's relatable to everyone in some way. The emotion/meaning to it is what catches my attention. You do have GREAT word choice and imagery here. A few grammical errors, but overall it's a decent piece. Very well written.