Burning Horizon

I accidently clicked comment before I was finished, haha. Sorry!

"Shut my eyes and let me stay"
- I don't like this, it doesn't flow with the other lines. The line by itself is nice but with the stanza = nono.
Try; I shut my eyes, please let me stay.
Or something along those lines?

"These closed doors with sleepy eyes (I'm speeding down the highway)
I leave behind so I can hide (Faster then I've ever been)
The truth in fact that I have lied (Watching all the people)
About my loves about my lives (Watching out for something)"
- I suggest taking the parathesised words to a line below the un-parenthesised words. (I know I just spelled those words completely wrong, but I think you know what I mean) - I know it will make the stanza a lot longer but it works better.

If you use any of my suggestions be sure to go through and change them completely, a lot of things are repeated a few times and you can't change one and not the other, haha.

Overall this is a good poem. I really enjoyed reading it. I don't want you to think I don't like it because of the changes I mentioned, to be honest I really like this poem. The idea of it and the way you wrote it is quite well. Almost like lyrics? If it is lyrics some of the changes I made may be wrong. I've commented poetry before that was written in song form, while not realizing it. This just seems like it could be a song, though I may be wrong.

One thing I do suggest (if this isn't a song) is cutting back on the fillers. You need to use more oomph and emotional phrases than what you are using. Well, it's not that you're not using them it's that you're downing them with repition and words like 'I' and so on.

Good poem though. Even if it doesn't seem like I liked it, I really did.

"Sit back silently steer"
- I feel that this line is missing something. Maybe because it's a sentence fragment? Though, I doubt that's the reason because those normally don't bother me in poetry. I do suggest correcting it though, it will help the flow. (I sit back and silently steer - you don't absolutely need 'I' but it helps as well)

"Watching all the people
Watching out for something
Something filled with reason
Something filled with trust"

- I don't like all the repitition here. It takes away from the stanza. I'm not saying remove all of it, just one or two of the repeated phrases. Try;

Watching all the people
Looking out for something
Something filled with reason,
something filled with trust

"Looking out for nothing much"
- I guess the 'Looking out for something' contradicts with this line here - it repeats 'looking out'. I do suggest somehow changing the two lines to not match. (I'd switch the other one, not this one)

"Of setting suns and days gone"
- Why not just add 'by' (days gone by)? I think that it sounds better and it's only a syllable, does nothing to the line or stanza but improve.

"In yellow line fractions"
- Line makes sense. But, if they're forgotten wouldn't they be 'yellow linED' ? Though your version makes sense, changing it would help improve.