Three Words

Nicely done, although there were a few things that got on my nerves.

1. "gorgeous lips" in the first stanza is a very physical aspect, while the general atmosphere of the poem is more abstract, as in, everything is going on in your mind, rather than in the physical world. Thus, instead of trying to describe the lips physically, it ought to be more conceptual -- such as gentle, silent, parted, etc.

2. "That is something I must accept" I didn't like this, because it wasn't the most poetic phrase in the world, but if you feel that it's right, don't change it. I understand what it's like to go through an emotional change through the writing of a poem; please don't change what you've once felt.

3. "And I'll be out of your hair" Please don't end a poem with this line. It sound very immature, and also as if you're brushing the subject aside after writing a whole poem on it.

Otherwise, nice piece! Keep writing!

Well you sure didn't disappoint me this is really good and i love it 5/5 again =]

Keep up the good work and i'll keep reading
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I LOVE THIS!!! It's the best one of yours! It's absolutely AMAZING! Left me speechless! It's so emotional! And has a great flow!!
EXCELLENT 5/5

SP<3

Emotional, Honest and Beutiful
I really enjoyed reading this
To change the poem would be to take away from it in my opinion

Excellent

I think its a very nice and straight from the heart honest poem. Beautifull job and i did like how you structured the piece, its different to most ^^