Well done 5/5

Woow..normally you are able to find
thouuuusands of poems that focus
on the topic "saying 'I love you'"..
but i must say that one was really really
good!! woow...great work!! ^^

This is a sweet love poem. i enjoyed reading it. but i think it seemed a bit forced. it flowed in some places and some it didnt... but overall it was nice

I really love the simplicity of this. When words flow straight from the heart it is easier for me to feel. I feel the pure emotion coming unmolested by extravagant drama

Well done

Wow well done this is wonderful, really sweet but also telling the sad part of it.
5/5

I love the way tou penned this down it was just simple and straigtforward.Indeed it was such a delightful to read. Great Job5/5

An unusual format, perhaps a passe' topic, but definitely a lack of metre'/rhythm. When the rhythm is not there what we try to write as poetry becomes prose with rhyme.

You'll be loved again...just smile and live. life sucks sometimes and i know how it feels to just want to hear those three words again but you know you never will. Don't worry you'll be loved.

I think that you need to put more emotional words in your poetry. The poem is good, you're even showing good emotion through-out it. But certain parts are lacking or could use better wording for such things being portrayed. I will say that you did an exceptional job executing meanings/flows/and everything overall.

example(s) on how to make it more emotional/things that need changed:

"I'm still waiting for something
Something that would be nice to hear
Three simple words you could whisper in my ear
Words that would mean the world
Coming from your perfect lips
Not hearing them is the reason that my heart rips"

[I'm still waiting for something,
something would be nice to hear.
Three simple words you could whisper in my ear
words that would mean the world to me
coming from your angelic lips
not hearing them is the reason
that my heart rips]

- I added a line but you need to realize that long lines aren't always best with short lines and when you're putting longer lines in a poem you need them to equal out overall. Therefore; short, medium, long, long, medium, short, short. You could take the last two lines and make them into one short line, such as; not hearing them rips my heart. Or something along those lines. I did change out 'perfect' with 'angelic' i thought that it was more emotion and sounded better. And, added on 'the world to me' in order to have a longer line AND give a more concrete meaning.

I want to hear them just one more time
But I never will again, I know
Because you said them so long ago
You made a promise to me
That you never kept
You are gone now
That is something I must accept

[I want to hear it just one more time,
But I never will again
because you said it so long ago.
You made me a promise
that you never meant to keep.
and you're now gone -
which is something I'll accept.]

- Once again you need to have evened lines for the flow (med., short, med., short, med., short, med.). I didn't change much except to help the flow/line lengths in this stanza. 'now gone' replaced 'gone now' because it sounded better to me. 'keep' sounds better than 'kept' along with the entire line there. And, I removed ' i know' because I thought it was too blunt for the poem

But three simple words is all I want
Just say them and I'll be gone
Show me that you did once care
That you did once love me
Say "I Love You"
And I'll be out of you hair

[Three simple words is all I want,
say them and I'll be gone.
Shoe me that you once did care,
that you once loved me.
Say "I Love You"
and I'll be out of YOUR hair]

- you = your. 'but' didn't sound right for the beginning, along with 'just'. 'did once' is very blunt., so i reworded it.

*** YOu have a great poem here. I know that I've made a lot of changes. In no way do I expect you to change anything or to even make all these changes. This is YOUR poem and only yours, it' is NOT mine and I know that. I almost feel bad for telling you all this, but a lot of it is just tiny things that will help it. You don't have major problems, just a bunch of tiny ones.

I liked it. Youve got talent, and you should totally keep writing. WOOT!

Omg i love this poem it is absolutly amazing!!!

It's the only poem of mine that I LIKE THANKS FOR THE COMMENTS

I think its a very nice and straight from the heart honest poem. Beautifull job and i did like how you structured the piece, its different to most ^^

Emotional, Honest and Beutiful
I really enjoyed reading this
To change the poem would be to take away from it in my opinion

Excellent

I LOVE THIS!!! It's the best one of yours! It's absolutely AMAZING! Left me speechless! It's so emotional! And has a great flow!!
EXCELLENT 5/5

SP<3

Well you sure didn't disappoint me this is really good and i love it 5/5 again =]

Keep up the good work and i'll keep reading
=]

Nicely done, although there were a few things that got on my nerves.

1. "gorgeous lips" in the first stanza is a very physical aspect, while the general atmosphere of the poem is more abstract, as in, everything is going on in your mind, rather than in the physical world. Thus, instead of trying to describe the lips physically, it ought to be more conceptual -- such as gentle, silent, parted, etc.

2. "That is something I must accept" I didn't like this, because it wasn't the most poetic phrase in the world, but if you feel that it's right, don't change it. I understand what it's like to go through an emotional change through the writing of a poem; please don't change what you've once felt.

3. "And I'll be out of your hair" Please don't end a poem with this line. It sound very immature, and also as if you're brushing the subject aside after writing a whole poem on it.

Otherwise, nice piece! Keep writing!