The title was interesting, but I have to suggest using capital letters on Nothing and But. This is very minute, but adds a lot.

In the second line, I think WHOLE TRUTH would sound better as THE WHOLE TRUTH.

In the second stanza, I would drop WELL from the beginning. The line sounds great without it.

In the forth stanza, I would add MY in front of HEART and swap AND for OR. When you read it the way its written, it sounds a little broken; like someone from a different country may speak it.

Overall, the poem is good, but I personally think that you put a little too much effort in forcing a rhyme scheme. This may sound better as a free verse or non-rhyming poem. When you don't have to conform to a rhyme pattern, you can use the words you really want to use instead of just the words that rhyme. I also thought that the poem lacked a little background history. It sounds like you came from a troubled past; if you did, you need to express it in the poem. The beginning of the poem flashed back to your past, but then it was right back to the end when you were facing the judge. I felt like I missed a stanza or two and thought the flashback was incomplete.

This seems like a good start to a poem, but I would give it a little more work before sharing it with the world.

Please don't take anything I said too personally. I just wanted to express my opinion and you can take it for what its worth.

Best wishes; keep writing.

I really liked this poem. It was well constructed and spoke of a meaningful topic. Most people may never experience what your poem speaks about and it is good to express the thoughts of a man in that situation.

5/5

P.S. Like Cyber Saiyan said, I suggest you capitalize the "nothing but" in the title; but that's up to you.

It was a very good poem. Though it lacked commas in appropriote parts, it flowed well, and I enjoyed reading it. I would separate the last line with commas, as such,"The story I just told is the truth, the whole truth, and nothing but."

Other than that, it was a great read.

Krista

Wow this poem was so vivid and real. very good. i really liked it.
just one thought: i think some of the lines were a bit long and the reader can easily get lost trying to make it rhyme...
other than at super poem (5)

Wow this poem was so vivid and real. very good. i really liked it.
just one thought: i think some of the lines were a bit long and the reader can easily get lost trying to make it rhyme...
other than at super poem (5)

Superb write ... your writes are always rhythemic ... its so easy to read...
another beautiful write from you...

"When love and mercy come knocking, do not leave your door shut
This story I just told is ,the truth, the whole truth, and nothing but. "

^^ I loved the ending very much ... such fine words you have used to describe the reality...

wonderful write
keep writing :)

noting = nothing

"He ask for the truth, the whole truth, and noting but"
[He askED for the truth, the whole truth and NOTHING but]
- No need for a comma before and. As well as a few spelling changes. Remember, the first stanza always has to be upity up on those kinds of things. To grab the attention.
(Not that it didn't grab my attention)

"Prison may hold my body but not heart, soul and mind"
[...but not heart, soul, and mind]
- Usage of commas was incorrect

Last line needs commas fixed too, I'm sure you know how to fix them.

This is a well written poem. It broke my heart. Mainly because it reminded me of many movies I've seen where people haven't been punished for horrible, horrible things they've done and others I've seen where innocent ones have been punished. I compare to movies instead of real life because I feel that movies show the emotional roller coasters to the entire world instead of just family and friends. This piece is just like a movie, it shares the emotions portrayed through-out every movie I've seen as such in ways that are vivid and lively.