My opinion,u r talented,however u should let ur poetry flow 4rm th soul.let ur soul bleed words no mind can comprehend.not much effort waz put in2 ths piece.th way its writtn makes one thnk it wud av bn beta suitd 4 a short story.there are no stylistic devices employd in th poem,nd therefore it falls under regular writin.av read anotha piece by u nd it made me bliv u cn actualy do better.jas my opinion though...dnt 4get u r talentd.