Literary Pollution

My comments have been un-detailed so far. They say what I mean but I don't think they're indepth enough and that's what I like to give. So, starting with this one the rest will be in depth.

There once was a poor poet who searched for a solution
A way to rid his heart, soul, and mind of literal pollution
Persecutor, savior, or victim he would play each role
Steadfast in discernment he would always search his soul

[There was once a poor poet who searched for a solution
A way to rid his heart, soul, and mind of literal pollution
Persecutor, savior, or victim - he would play each role
Steadfast in discernment, he would always search his soul]
- Loved this stanza. A few changes were made; 'was once' instead of 'once was' - makes more sense to me and sounds better. The commas and dashes were added to separate areas that needed punctuation in order to flow correctly.

He found his mind was feeble and his heart was soft
When he tried to share wisdom, people often scoffed
When he tried to be a savior it would likely end the same
With a victim, and a persecutor to condemn and cast blame
[He found his mind was feeble, his heart was soft
When he tried to share wisdom the people often scoffed
When he tried to be a savior it would likely end the same
With a victim and a persecutor to condemn and cast blame]
- Well written. Two changes; I took out 'and' in the first line, I thought it was too much and not needed there. Second line I added 'the' in order to make the line flow better without commas. I just thought the comma was an unneeded pause and it would be better with one more syllable, rather than the pause..

When the poet played the victim he would have to cry
There are plenty of persecutors willing to crucify
There is only one Savior who will judge the living and the dead
When the poet was his wisest when he did not try to get ahead
[When the poet played the victim he would have to cry
There are plenty of persecutors willing to crucify
There is only one Savior who will judge the living and the dead
When the poet was his wisest he didn't try to get ahead]
- Only changes made were in the last line. Didn't like how you had it worded so I had to re-word it to make it sound/look better.

You have a great poem. Once again, it's not a good overall poem or an okay poem, it's a great poem. There are a few more suggestions than the last few. I don't think it's because I'm giving more detail but rather the simple fact your lines are longer, therefore there's more room for mistake. Majority of the things I found wrong were actually dealing with the punctuation and a few with the wording. It's a well written poem though (:

Liked it - great meaning/emotion.

There once was a poor poet who searched for a solution
A way to rid his heart, soul, and mind of literal pollution
Persecutor, savior, or victim he would play each role
Steadfast in discernment he would always search his soul
^^great opening! it was relatable so many people look for an out let a way to express what they are feeling and relive themselves from the pain and torment of what is inhabiting their mind Having the reader relate to your writing is so important it gets us involved in what you are writing we pay attention if we feel it has a connection to us

When he persecuted he discovered his own faults
Those who throw stones must live inside of vaults
My savior told the sinless to cast the first stone
He and the victim found themselves all alone
^^i remember that bible story : ) i love that your poetry references your religion in it i respect that i think it is amazing that you are that passionate about God to incorporate him in something like this not many people do that now a days it is rare to come across

He found his mind was feeble and his heart was soft
When he tried to share wisdom, people often scoffed
When he tried to be a savior it would likely end the same
With a victim, and a persecutor to condemn and cast blame
^^ flawless ! i loved the flow my favorite part was the last line powerful emotion in it intense : )

When the poet played the victim he would have to cry
There are plenty of persecutors willing to crucify
There is only one Savior who will judge the living and the dead
When the poet was his wisest when he did not try to get ahead
^^Important lesson here! sometimes when you are humble you get rewarded God tells us to be humble and we can see in life that it will be rewarded maybe not right away maybe not here on this material earth but one day he promises it and God does not break his promises ever! he is perfect!! i loved the message here favorite stanza!

Ah what more can i say ?! i loved this piece! 5/5 : )