by Teria
Honestly, I think the flow was COMPLETELY off in this poem. I think that you should switch it up a lot. One major problem with the poem, other than flow, and might have something to do with the flow is that you used 'she' and 'her' over and over. It was too much. Though, I do like how you used 'comeback kid' over and over, because that's needed in a way. She/her isn't. |
I like this... it's sort of sad, sort of dark, sort of mysterious and brave. It's emotionally valued and well written. I like the way you put the words in the order. |