Wide Awake Road

A great piece of poetry. Its left me a bit lost for words. The flow was good and the depth behind your words was amazing.
'angled vines of failure' i loved that. It really made me think.. its very clever. The word choice throughout the whole poem is spectacular, but that particular line really stood out to me.
Awesome work.. Sorry there isnt much more for me to say.
5/5

An excellent write and should win your contest. The message is clear and powerful. 5/5

Tangled vines of failure
creeping ahead,
scheming to topple
from path you tread.

Failure is like a vine, creeping around always trying to topple us or deter us from the path we have chosen.

Ride on conviction
to mellow dreams abode,
across the no-where land
awaits, wide awake road.

Conviction is a vehicle by which we can ride to our dreams across all obstacles with our eyes wide open on a wide awake road.

I must say, this piece was quite elegantly written and the word choice created a traquil feeling over me while reading. I've read a few of your pieces before and quite like your style, but this poem was definitly eye catching and caught my attention.

This piece in a way reminded me of Robery Frosts poem "A Road Not Taken" Simply because it shows paths within like and how once you open one door, it leads to the next and so on. This poem really interpreted paths within life in my eyes and I was really intrigued by the word choice you created to fit in with the poem. It doesn't seem forced what so ever, more like it was flowing off you tongue.

"Tentative silhouettes
prancing alongside,
blurring mist of deceit
blindfolding sight."

-Like I said above your words were quite elegant and created a feeling of warmth in the first two lines. Although when you got to the third and fourth lines I felt a chill due to your word choice such as "mist" ect. I like how you did that with a subtle change in words. It was quite clever in my opinion.

To me this piece can be interpreted in many different ways, I already talked about roads and paths within life but at the same time this piece could also be interpreted as a sad love poem. I feel like it could be seen as a heart being shatter and a person trying to find another path away from deciete. Interesting.

Overall this was a lovely poem which I really enjoyed. Definitly worth the read. -Mel

I love this from the beginning to the end.
Every stanza is so beautifully complex and metaphoric, and I honestly admire your choice of words through the whole poem.
Your poems are often so deep, and this one is not an exception. It can be interpreted on several ways, which I really like when it comes to poetry.

Overall, I think that this is definitely very original, intelligent and well written piece, filled with powerful meanings.

Also, I like the rhythm and flow that you created throughout the poem, it's really good but not overwhelming comparing to the effective imagery, which is great.

"Tentative silhouettes
prancing alongside,
blurring mist of deceit
blindfolding sight."
`Absolutely flawless word choice, very descriptive. Especially loved your line.. "prancing alongside.." Wonderful. Prancing was perfect.

"Tangled vines of failure
creeping ahead,
scheming to topple
from path you tread."
`I loved these lines.. its so true.. in life you go down a path and you have thoughts of failure creeping up on you. Loved the word choice again, woow. Flawless. [Lets hope I interpreted that right, lol.]

"Discarding the veil on
unfaltering faith,
buoyant rays will reveal
destiny's gate."
`Amazingly written, again. Wow youre leaving me speechless. I have no words.. your word choice is just perfect.

"Ride on conviction
to mellow dreams abode,
across the no-where land
awaits, wide awake road."
`Amazing rhyme. Flow was great throughout. Hm, just wonderful. Loved the ending here. These dreams lead you to a wide open road. Loved the usage of the word awake instead of open like I said.

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Well done.
Deserves a nomination.

5/5