My Best

by iFallToPieces   Jan 5, 2009


I am sitting in my darkened room,
Trying to end the pain,
Thinking, thinking, over again,
If you are worth the gloom.

If I caused myself some harm,
I bet it would not matter,
If I let blood run down my arm,
Your heart would not shatter.

I am trying to end the suffering,
I am trying to end the pain.
The knife, deepens in my arm,
As the blood runs down again.

A tear falls down my face,
As I cut again too deep.
For you still havent noticed,
That you are the reason I weep.

Weeks keep on passing,
The cuts just get deeper.
Tonight is the final cut,
And I am sure it will be a keeper.

So once again I sit,
In my darkened room,
For as poorly it is lit,
I will finally end my gloom.

The final cut is deep,
Deeper than the rest.
All you need to know,
Is I finally did my best.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Jennifer

    Wow another good one!

  • 15 years ago

    by Jaklynn

    This is a really amazing poem, I actually felt relly sad when I read it. I like the misleading title, it really made me think it was about something else. This is very clever and I really enjoyed it.
    5/5
    Take care, I hope this is not true.

  • 15 years ago

    by Weeping Willow

    That was completely amazing i know exactly how that feels and the emotion represented in that was amazing. but sometimes its good that we dont do our best.

  • 15 years ago

    by oddi tea

    Wow. This is a sad, depressing poem. It brings together the cutting and the need to be noticed by 'the one'. I like the ending how you say 'I did my best' It really just ended the poem and left me with few questions on what was happening and if the story really was ended. Great job. 5.5

  • 15 years ago

    by Cara

    Interesting title.. it made me think the poem was going to be about something else. The poem had really good flow and rhyme for the most part, this stanza:
    A tear falls down my face,
    As I cut again too deep.
    For you still havent noticed,
    That you are the reason why I weep.
    ^^
    i would cut out the why. It would better the flow i think.

    Apart from that it was a really good write.
    Never let a guy be the reason you hurt yourself hun.. no guy is worth your pain.
    5/5

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