Listen!

by Em   Jan 7, 2009


This isn't just for my friends.

God just listen, look this way,
I have another prayer today,
It's for someone that is walking away.
Give me the spotlight, I need your attention,
God, my friends needs your protection.

Give them your hand, show them your power,
They take for granted everything you've delievered.
I, myself, can't believe, how they don't understand all the simple things.
As if life isn't enough, the air they breathe,
The friends that care they don't believe.

Turn them around, tap their shoulders,
Make them open up to you;
Because I know, you know, they are in need of you,
But all they do is lie and lie some more,
But they must be dumb because you always know.

It breaks my heart to see,
The only reason they are hurting is because they don't believe,
I want to speak up, I want to tell them,
But when I open my mouth,
They'll just all be hating.
My words aren't enough, they think they're better,
No need for them to admit because it'll only make them bitter,
And I know as I watch them walk away,
They are dying inside, so full of hate.

God, you gave so much to them,
Gave up your only son for them,
What can they do but just always say,
"That is BS, nobody would die for me."

God, I think it hurts you, your creations, your love,
Turning their backs on you,
But I'll do what I can for you Lord,
And I know it may not go according to plan,
But I trust in you and I have faith,
Hopefully they'll look this way.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Chynna

    I LUV DIS POEM ALOT..KEEP IT UP..X

  • 15 years ago

    by Ed or Ian Henderson

    I didn't really see the direction this was taking, at first. It seemed with the opening lines that there was a crisis of faith at the core of the poem, but that it was between you and your God, yet it develops into quite an open prayer to (fake?) friends that, for me personally, seems quite diffident. It had a very lyrical flow to it too, quite offbeat. So while the content is not my cup of tea, I like the way it's structured.

  • 15 years ago

    by InvisiblyHeartless

    I like the message in this. It's deep, emotional. I feel that it's a little forced. I can understand the feeling and I, myself, have felt this way many times. Some of the lines interrupt the groove of this poem. ex.
    "They take for granted everything you've delievered.
    I, myself, can't believe, how they don't understand all the simple things.
    As if life isn't enough, the air they breathe,"
    The long line there, it's sort of wordy.
    A possible suggestion would be 'I can't see how the simple things blind them.'
    This line, I feel, is also a bit to long.
    "The only reason they are hurting is because they don't believe,"
    A simple edit maybe? 'Their disbelief, causing them the hurt.'
    You started out really strong, I feel that you lost some of your authority and power over the words after the second stanza. The emotional force grew great enough that it seemed to draw away from some of the lines. I feel that if you shortened and lengthened some lines, this message would hit me harder.
    You seem to really care for these friends, these people. But God can't MAKE them do anything. Ask him to help, guide them, and you, you can encourage them.
    I did like the essence, the flavor in this piece.
    Good job.

    Lexie

  • 15 years ago

    by Vera

    Awesome...
    God knows u r doing ur best 4 them, Keep it up, it may be hard sometimes but we must try not to give up on people we love...cuz God never does...

    Great Job :)

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