Nicely written, I liked the unique rhyme scheme going from stanza to stanza. The flow was excellent as well as the overall structure of the poem. I really liked you choice of words, great write. Keep up the fantastic work!

Peace, Joe

Wow. The sad...the crying...the depression! This one hit me deep. The repition of 'my angel' just added to it. Such a strong poem such a sad message. 5/5

"My thoughts become strangled..
And all I see is who I could really be.."
`Okay, I think you could take your dots out and replace them with a better puncuation maybe a period or comma wherever it fits best. I think that with the proper puncuation your poem would flow flawlessly. I think your word choice was great though, esp. strangling.. I dont hear that that often!

"In the Arms of my Angel,
I see where my noose had dangled..
And what all the pain did to me.."
`Uncapitolize Arms and Angel.. theres no reason for them to be captiolized. Secondly, again.. the dots replace with proper puncuation [comma or period] whatever fits best.

"Through the Tears of my Angel,"
`Uncapitolize Tears and Angel
`I liked how you switched it up, the first line of the first and second stanzas were the same.. yet you changed it up so it wasnt too repetitive.

"And through the Tears of my Angel,
She Say's that her noose had dangled,
From the Balcony where you met me.."
`I like the similarity of this stanza with the second stanza.. unique.
`Uncapitolize Tears, Angel, Say's, and Balcony.

"With the Hand of my Angel,
Our hands become tangled..
I find scars of what she was before me.."
`Uncapitolize Hand, Angel
`I dont like the usage of the word tangled maybe intertwined, tangled doesnt fit well with this sentence.
`Wasnt much a fan of the dots again, replace with commas or periods.

"I hold the Heart of my Angel,
It's so scarred and mangled,
At the lightest touch she can barely breathe, "
`Great work, great wording.. probably your best stanza if I had to pick my favorite.

An overall okay write.
Grammatical issues.
Ill give you a 4/5.

Well i like what you did with this poem. I liked it before you changed it, but i like it even more now. Again, i like the repetition because it somehow touches me.. it shows how she really is your angel.. i dont know, that didnt make sense, but i did really like the repetition.

With the Hand of my Angel,
Our hands become tangled..
I find scars of what she was before me..
^^ My favourite stanza. It shows what she was going through before she met you.. and you changed that.

I agree with the things Temps said about the capitals and punctuation but apart from that i thought it was a great poem.
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Simple yet moving.
well done

Int the last stanza I think that you should add a (so) before mangled. It will make it parrallel and will flow easier

The repitition of hands in the fifth stanza makes that part slightly redundant even though you only said it twice

other than that the poem is very powerful, though depressing. Amazing work and don't let my nit-pickiness upset you.

In the Arms of my Angel,
My thoughts become strangled..
And all I see is who I could really be..
^^ very strong introduction. Suggestions though i would put in the correct punctuation. it should have only one period on the second line and "My" shouldn't be capitalized. The last line should only have on period as well the only reason i suggest this is because it makes the poem look neater and more official. Other than that you express the possibilities that arise when an angel holds you you see things differently and innocently just as they appear it's sort of makes me think of through a child's eyes because children see the world without all the corruption and hurt they see things we don't

In the Arms of my Angel,
I see where my noose had dangled..
And what all the pain did to me..
^^Ok now you are discovering more things. You can pin point exactly what hurt you. I think that is powerful. I get this vibe that ((i could be wrong :x)) it is the angel holding you to protect you and help you heal after you see these things i could be way off but thats what i got from this stanza

Through the Tears of my Angel,
I see her thoughts become strangled,
And I see who we're ready to be..
^^wow that first line really made me sad..i picture and think of Angels as sacred and protective creatures to imagine one crying hurts ! I like how you went back to tie in with an earlier stanza

And through the Tears of my Angel,
She Say's that her noose had dangled,
From the Balcony where you met me..
^^again tying back into what was previously said was clever it made each stanza important and have a recognizable purpose in this poem.

With the Hand of my Angel,
Our hands become tangled..
I find scars of what she was before me..
^^ i loved this stanza personally. It gave an Angel the feel of being real because everyone has a past no matter what you become in the future you past is still a part of you you can't change it but you can grow from it powerful message in such compacted lines!

I hold the Heart of my Angel,
It's so scarred and mangled,
At the lightest touch she can barely breathe,
^^ wow...great ending. That was a twist! I thought the angel was going to be the one saving you! I like when ending's aren't predictable it makes your poem unique. It was a heartfelt sad ending but brilliant.

I would just fix the punctuation! 5/5

This style is very original to me I felt the flow before I read the second triplet which blended very nicely for me. I also felt the emotion of touching and being touched beyond the physical realm which of course added to my enjoyment of read this poem

This poem was very good, well written, and a good flow. I like how you started each stanza. It has a lot of good emotion! My favorite stanza...

"With the Hand of my Angel,
Our hands become tangled..
I find scars of what she was before me.."

The last line seems really emotional. I really like it!

All together it was a great poem excellent even.5/5

SP

Strong poem
very well done love it!!