Comments : Written Out of Thoughts

  • 15 years ago

    by mandy

    Very well put. It had really strong emotions, 5/5.

    -mandy :)

  • 15 years ago

    by StandStill

    LOONNNG gabby comment time :D

    Sometimes what you need is a friend
    Not someone you can gossip with or hang out
    Someone you can actually trust
    You can talk to them about your problems

    ^^ this first part, it really makes you think "what's friendship to me". Whichhhhh I like, a lot. because it's a question a lot of people really need to ask themselves....are their friends more than just, you know, door knobs.

    You never really liked me did you?
    Always left me feeling like the out cast
    And now you're in total shock
    Why the poem's coming out so fast
    But you don't even see why I'm so sick of you
    I'm sorry, I deserve better
    Then friends that treat people like you

    ^^ wow...um, is it bad that I stopped thinking about that this was from your friend's thoughts and not mine? sounds like how i feel about a certain person i know...one of my favourite parts about your poems, jesse, is that even if they're not made to be relatable, they're super relatable in some backwards little way. and so the reader can always feel them. :]

    love it wesse.
    tell her i think she deserves better too.

  • 15 years ago

    by abullettotheheart

    Great poem