I'll Tell You With A Kiss...

The opening line could of been a better attention catcher if you wrote it like this, "My heart, an timeless bomb" which is in return saying the samething that you wrote, but just a little more appealing towards the eye.

Overall a wonderful write, I enjoyed the read.

Peace, Joe

"This time bomb called my heart
Slowly swelling with emotions kept inside..."

Excellent descriptions here, a very intriguing opening that captured my heart and soul.

"I long for the moments when I can just gaze into your glimmering eyes
Clutch you tight to my chest
And kiss you passionately in the dead of night
And tell you clearly
From my lips to yours
That...
I love you...
With but a single kiss to show,
All the emotion pent up inside..."

What passion and love you have portrayed in these words, expressing to your true love how fervent you feel for her...Beautiful work.

"With my lips on yours I will lose myself
With my heart already given to you I am grounded"

Good wording, this is flawless!

"And I will not question
My heart is yours to do with what you will..
And I'll tell you all of this...
With a single...
Passionate...
Kiss..."

A really sweet ending, I loved reading this passionate piece about two lovers crazy for each other. 5/5 from me, take care...